These endless night

slaveofAllah88

Slave of Allah (swt)
Allah protect you all from these endless nights
Where i sit in agony under the moon light
Thinking about those stars sparking so bright
Every moment reminding me of that girl I thought was right
How i used to pick flowers for her with delight

Roses are red violet are blue there is no one sweeter than u, was what i had said
But she broke my heart that was hanging by a thread
My wounds bleed while I fantasize her return
Sulking in my sorrows as my heart burns
In my last breathe, I raised by hand for dua in pain
Praying for a glance before the final drop of blood drips from my veins

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lol ok i know this sucks really bad :p but everyone is writing wonderful poetry i was like man i gotto try to, PS: im not dieing :p
so plz :) do tell me how bad it is in the politest way possible lol
:) its not about me everyone :) i just took the last words and try to make a sentence out of them i was trying to rhyme the last word of every sentence
 

Bluegazer

Junior Member
Are you having any personal problems, brother?! Does this peom reflect your personal feelings?


I hope you're alright and in good health. And may Allah bless you always.
 

slaveofAllah88

Slave of Allah (swt)
Are you having any personal problems, brother?! Does this peom reflect your personal feelings?


I hope you're alright and in good health. And may Allah bless you always.

:salam2:
:) brother :) what did u think about the poem ? was it bad :S
dont worry brother about what it reflect :) i just want to know wat does everyone think about it
 

~Ali_

Fixing da foundation
Assalamualaikum

lol - in our "western world" someone who didnt know you might truly classify you as a "emo"

I like the last 3 lines, and the first 3 :) - hey man thats alot better then anything I would come up with.. poetry.. not my style

Walaikumasalam
 

wannabe_muttaqi

A MUSLIM BROTHER
Assalamu Alaikum

:salam2: ,
Mashallah it is a very nice one. but if this is what you are going thru ( not the last part as you said), then it is not very happy one.

:wasalam:
 

slaveofAllah88

Slave of Allah (swt)
aslam o alikum

lol im sorry :) everyone its a very happy one :p i suck at poetry lol i was just bored and i just started putting words together lol
lol man lol must be really bad at it lol cuz most of the ppl think im crazy now lol and 1 person thinks im emo lol


brother ~ALi , lol i cant be emo :p in the poem the person doesn't cut himself up :p its the wounds from the love lol that is making him bleed comone LOL try to understand the depthness of the shallow poem lol

:) thx dude u guyz can tell i was really bored
 

ruki4eva

Muslim Unity...
:salam2:
brother well written MashaAllah
but its sad hope Allah makes things easier for you
inshaAllah are you ok?
:salam2:
 

slaveofAllah88

Slave of Allah (swt)
:salam2:
brother well written MashaAllah
but its sad hope Allah makes things easier for you
inshaAllah are you ok?
:salam2:

:salam2:
lol :) i really gotto put a note below the poem that this is not about me :) thank u for ur dua sister :) but its not for u its just a poem the last words rhymed lol somewhat so i kept on writing watever fitted
 

ruki4eva

Muslim Unity...
:salam2:
lol :) i really gotto put a note below the poem that this is not about me :) thank u for ur dua sister :) but its not for u its just a poem the last words rhymed lol somewhat so i kept on writing watever fitted

:salam2:
ok lol sorry i thought its about you
sorry forgive me lol
im so stupid i didn't read the bottom part
:wasalam:
 

slaveofAllah88

Slave of Allah (swt)
:salam2:
ok lol sorry i thought its about you
sorry forgive me lol
im so stupid i didn't read the bottom part
:wasalam:

:salam2:
lol no worries LOL :) i know its really sad and stuff but i was trying to write something deep and emotional LOL guess it didn't work out that well :p now i feel like emo lol
 

ruki4eva

Muslim Unity...
:salam2:
lol no worries LOL :) i know its really sad and stuff but i was trying to write something deep and emotional LOL guess it didn't work out that well :p now i feel like emo lol

:salam2:
thank u for forgiving me
lol nah man its good what is an emo? lol
:wasalam:
 

slaveofAllah88

Slave of Allah (swt)
:salam2:
thank u for forgiving me
lol nah man its good what is an emo? lol
:wasalam:

:salam2:
lol emo is like punksters kid, that like to cut themselves up and give themselves pain cuz they get fun from pain for some reason, they always wear black and stuff and are just weird they are really suicidal like they do stuff gothic style
 

ruki4eva

Muslim Unity...
:salam2:
lol emo is like punksters kid, that like to cut themselves up and give themselves pain cuz they get fun from pain for some reason, they always wear black and stuff and are just weird they are really suicidal like they do stuff gothic style

:salam2:
lol thanx for the reply:)
:wasalam:
 

Muslim18

Blessed Muslimah
:salam2:

That was soooo emotional subahnnallah i can see why everyone gets the impression its about you even though you clearly wrote a disclaimer at the bottom but i cant help but wonder when writing something this great and soo poetic i think personal experiences sparked it lol sorry if i offended you in any way, thats what i feel the poem was saying to me But very deep and good for someone who cant write poetry :SMILY231:

Are you sure your not a professional writer???

I wish you all the best bro:)

:wasalam:
 

slaveofAllah88

Slave of Allah (swt)
:salam2:

That was soooo emotional subahnnallah i can see why everyone gets the impression its about you even though you clearly wrote a disclaimer at the bottom but i cant help but wonder when writing something this great and soo poetic i think personal experiences sparked it lol sorry if i offended you in any way, thats what i feel the poem was saying to me But very deep and good for someone who cant write poetry :SMILY231:

Are you sure your not a professional writer???

I wish you all the best bro:)

:wasalam:

:salam2:
lol no way sister i wish i was professional this didn't seem that much of a nice poem lol anywyz i just thought i write it

yea maybe it has some personal touches but :p thats why they call them personal eh lol
:) thx for saying so many sweet things :) i hope it was a lil deep , i was trying to go for something deep and emotional not sure how it turned out thou :)

thx for liking it
 

Asja

Pearl of Islaam
Assalamu Allaicomu Wa Rahmatullah Wa barakatuhu dear brother Shaaher.

Awwwwwww,mashallah dear brother!!!!!:) I did not knew that you are writeing poems,Mashallah.
It is very beautiful and sweet poem brother,and you have a great talent for writing.
I like the title of the poem "Endless night" as it is used like metaphora because the night is not endless like anything but with writeing poems it can be used as if we feel pain we think that the night is endless.I understand it on this way,but as you are writter you know better???
And I would also like to say that maybe brother,the poem would be better if it would have some end which will reflect the whole theme of your poem,Inshallah.:)

By the way,if i can ask brother,what is the idea of the poem,as I did not understand it very well???

Keep it up the good work.

May Allah bless you:tti_sister:

:wasalam:
 

Muslim18

Blessed Muslimah
:salam2:

Your welcome bro

And how are you not sure it was good did you not read it lol

Well i am not good at making poems but i know a good poem when i see one :SMILY149:

:wasalam:
 
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