allah is with me
Rabana Wa laqal Hamd
yep im ur bro (bhai )
ya ...be proud of that!
yep im ur bro (bhai )
ya ...be proud of that!
well it is really beautiful...but alhamdulilah it is short..once i read someone's poem which consists 60 stanza(not on tti but in real life)..yeah..thats too much though...
i used to write poem..but hv stopped and i can't really get in the mood of writing one..lol..inshaAllah one day all of u could read mine..lol
:salam2: Brother Shaheer
The good thing about being a poet is YOU get to chose how you want to write it. There is no specific rule to writing it. No right nor wrong IMO. However, there are ways to better them. If you don't mind me sharing my 1 cent
I noticed you were trying hard to rhyme the whole first stanza... but mind you the 'nights' is SLIGHTLY off the light, bright.... Then in the second stanza there was no rhyme at all. What about trying to 'formulate' a rhythm? A few examples could be...
All the lines in the stanza to rhyme ...bright, light, right, delight
Every alternate line to rhyme.... bright, life, light, wife
The ending of each stanza to rhyme. I used this technique in my poem about Hijab. See HERE
Sometimes when sentences are long and others short, try put the long sentence in 2 lines, giving the reader some sort of beat.
Then come those deeper poems that talk about something else and mean something else. Take for example Brother MuslimBrother92 poem (See HERE) whilst talking of a bird, one could interpret it as Iman as I did. However the poet himself could be talking about something else altogether. I love the depth in such poems. You can still use rhymes for such or chose not to rhyme at all! I believe the diversity of it all makes it beautiful.
Like i said Brother, there is NOTHING wrong with how you wrote yours. All that surprises me is how were you capable of writing something that you disclaimed isn't about you? I find this SO unbelievably difficult! I personally need inspiration - that hasn't come since i believe last year! :shymuslima1:
For a first timer... i say Well Done Brother... waiting for your second one
oh :shymuslima1: (imagine A BOY!!)
:lol: .. akhi u always put shy muslima smilie n say imagine a boy :lol: ..
btw nice poem bro i knw bro wats there in ur HEART
MAKE DUA & REMEMBER ME IN UR DUA :tti_sister: (imagine a BOY) :lol:
i was like man i gotto try to
Making u use ur imagination akhi hehe i cant help it there is no shy brother emote lol
ameen
and :lol: @ :tti_sister: (imagine a BOY) COpy cat
Ooops my bad!
From this statement i thought you were a first timer :shymuslima1: My apologies.
To be honest Brother Shaheer, when I am inspired, I let my heart guide my pen... i write lousy poems when i sit to think about them
It's not only sadness that one finds difficult to talk about... sometimes even extreme happiness makes you lost for words... i believe poetry to be at its best when your heart is involved. I was once extremely happy for quitting a job i didn't know what to do but i felt like jumping around from happiness (dont ask :shymuslima1: ) i wrote a poem instead. lol. Maybe one day i will share it :shymuslima1:
Am glad you liked my poem and hope it wasn't too long for sister revert2007 :shymuslima1: It's one of my longest i believe. Jazakalla Kheiran
Your words are nice and the poetry is to keep words ryhming also hide some meanings in the lines.
Those were beautiful lines.
May Allah bless everyone with correct path.
Ameen.
SHUT UP im not even close to emo
those are deep deep words LOL u wont understand and yes i wrote it
hahahhaha sach karwa lagta ha...lolz kiddin kiddin bro itna gussa nahi
i know ur not emo take a chill pill :lol:
wese pehla shazia na shut nd ullu now u sayin...*wondering whats up with people who keep sayin shup up and ullu*
:lol:
bhai peom samaj aa hi gai thi aap na kon sa lord of the rings ki book jese mushkil english use ki thi